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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times

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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although, human life has different stages, teenage and adult life is considered important. While some people believe that adolescent years are the happiest times in most people's lives, I would argue that adulthood brings more joy despite greater liabilities.
Those who advocate of teenage years as the happiest times may argue that during these times, we start to experience real word and pursue our own dreams. This is because during these times, we start to begin attending high school, where we not only study favorite subjects but also make new friends. Furthermore, there are no financial responsibilities during teenage for most teenagers, therefore, they can fully enjoy without any tension. For example, during youth, parents cover all the expenditures like outings, movies, parties, assignments etc along with a monthly pocket money, thus giving a stress free environment to live teenage life.

However, adulthood not only comes with just the obligations, but also with old friends, family and money. This is because in mature life we have a profession to earn and a family to support. Moreover we can celebrate our success and important life events with family. For example, we can travel to our favorite destination to celebrate anniversary with soul mate or birthday of children. Furthermore, adulthood allows us to be self sustained and gives us freedom to live life our own way. These are some of the moments from adult life which gives us immense happiness and can’t be possible in teenage.

In conclusion, although teenage life gives us a stress free environment to enjoy life, I feel that that adulthood gives us more happiness in the form of family and profession and to cherish moments with them.
 

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Dear Raj,
Please provide your valuable suggestions with band score on above essay.
Thanks..!!!
 

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Use of although does not seem good here.

When there are two objects, the noun becomes plural.
Overall it is good for the 7 band. Take care of small grammatical issues.
Hi Raj,
Thank you for your valuable inputs, I am aiming at minimum 7 bands in writing and your suggestions are very helpful..!!!
 

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Hello..I am new here. How this platform works for writing and speaking.any assistance pls???
Hello, if you want your essay or task 1 evaluated you can post them under appropriate category. If you have any questions regarding writing module you can post that too. In the general section you can post if are looking for a speaking partner, however, that's not certain if you get someone but writing evaluation is confirmed.
 

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Hi Raj,
Thank you for your valuable inputs, I am aiming at minimum 7 bands in writing and your suggestions are very helpful..!!!
Your writing seems like learned and prepared well. There are just little bit of things that shouldn't really affect the band score. But it's good to write as correct as possible.
 

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