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Essay writing competition - Last date of submission 13 December 2021

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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?
 

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Please see the attached . That’s my essay
 

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Some people believe visiting various destinations to learn their culture and tradition is not imperative, instead, the same information is available on various referral books, cinema and can be achieved by surfing on the internet. I totally agree with this statement, as with the advancement of technology, so much content is provided to the user just at a finger touch away, whereas traveling to places demand enormous time and money.

The new generation has an advantage of various resources for understanding cultural differences in different places. Without actually visiting a place or interacting with the people there, people can now imagine customs and rituals through books, more colorful visualization is depicted in films, and now on the internet, people who have actually gone and spent quality time with such people have shared vlogs and blogs that gives a real-time experience and also are free so watch. People are now exposed to the world, and knows exactly what is happening around them with ample information on the internet. For example, a famous YouTuber named Sujith Singh travels to all places around the world and covers different festivals, ceremonies, cultural activities, customs, cuisines and various tourist attractions of a place. just by watching his channel, an individual can become familiar with a place.

Travel always is expensive and time-consuming. Traveling to places requires days of preparation, planning and execution of plans. It also requires financial assistance to afford the tickets for the flights or the train, for the accommodations and for the food. Some may need to use their savings or need to take aids from their family or close relatives. It also demands some time off from regular work which can also have problems at workplace. Hence, traveling just for the sake of knowing a culture or tradition of a place is pointless as cheaper and effective options are available theses days such as videos, movies, and information on journals and books.

In conclusion, traveling just to learn the cultural diversities is not necessary as it takes a lot of your time and effort and also the same can be learned through books, films and is available for free on the internet.
 

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Some people believe visiting various destinations to learn their culture and tradition is not imperative, instead, the same information is available on various referral books, cinema and can be achieved by surfing on the internet. I totally agree with this statement, as with the advancement of technology, so much content is provided to the user just at a finger touch away, whereas traveling to places demand enormous time and money.

The new generation has an advantage of various resources for understanding cultural differences in different places. Without actually visiting a place or interacting with the people there, people can now imagine customs and rituals through books, more colorful visualization is depicted in films, and now on the internet, people who have actually gone and spent quality time with such people have shared vlogs and blogs that gives a real-time experience and also are free so watch. People are now exposed to the world, and knows exactly what is happening around them with ample information on the internet. For example, a famous YouTuber named Sujith Singh travels to all places around the world and covers different festivals, ceremonies, cultural activities, customs, cuisines and various tourist attractions of a place. just by watching his channel, an individual can become familiar with a place.

Travel always is expensive and time-consuming. Traveling to places requires days of preparation, planning and execution of plans. It also requires financial assistance to afford the tickets for the flights or the train, for the accommodations and for the food. Some may need to use their savings or need to take aids from their family or close relatives. It also demands some time off from regular work which can also have problems at workplace. Hence, traveling just for the sake of knowing a culture or tradition of a place is pointless as cheaper and effective options are available theses days such as videos, movies, and information on journals and books.

In conclusion, traveling just to learn the cultural diversities is not necessary as it takes a lot of your time and effort and also the same can be learned through books, films and is available for free on the internet.
Thank you.
 

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Some people believe visiting various destinations to learn their culture and tradition is not imperative, instead, the same information is available on various referral books, cinema and can be achieved by surfing on the internet. I totally agree with this statement, as with the advancement of technology, so much content is provided to the user just at a finger touch away, whereas traveling to places demand enormous time and money.

The new generation has an advantage of various resources for understanding cultural differences in different places. Without actually visiting a place or interacting with the people there, people can now imagine customs and rituals through books, more colorful visualization is depicted in films, and now on the internet, people who have actually gone and spent quality time with such people have shared vlogs and blogs that gives a real-time experience and also are free so watch. People are now exposed to the world, and knows exactly what is happening around them with ample information on the internet. For example, a famous YouTuber named Sujith Singh travels to all places around the world and covers different festivals, ceremonies, cultural activities, customs, cuisines and various tourist attractions of a place. just by watching his channel, an individual can become familiar with a place.

Travel always is expensive and time-consuming. Traveling to places requires days of preparation, planning and execution of plans. It also requires financial assistance to afford the tickets for the flights or the train, for the accommodations and for the food. Some may need to use their savings or need to take aids from their family or close relatives. It also demands some time off from regular work which can also have problems at workplace. Hence, traveling just for the sake of knowing a culture or tradition of a place is pointless as cheaper and effective options are available theses days such as videos, movies, and information on journals and books.

In conclusion, traveling just to learn the cultural diversities is not necessary as it takes a lot of your time and effort and also the same can be learned through books, films and is available for free on the internet.
Hello, you are the only one to submit the essay. Would you like one to one feedback session or discuss it on FB live?
 

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Some people believe visiting various destinations to learn their culture and tradition is not imperative, instead, the same information is available on various referral books, cinema and can be achieved by surfing on the internet. I totally agree with this statement, as with the advancement of technology, so much content is provided to the user just at a finger touch away, whereas traveling to places demand enormous time and money.

The new generation has an advantage of various resources for understanding cultural differences in different places. Without actually visiting a place or interacting with the people there, people can now imagine customs and rituals through books, more colorful visualization is depicted in films, and now on the internet, people who have actually gone and spent quality time with such people have shared vlogs and blogs that gives a real-time experience and also are free so watch. People are now exposed to the world, and knows exactly what is happening around them with ample information on the internet. For example, a famous YouTuber named Sujith Singh travels to all places around the world and covers different festivals, ceremonies, cultural activities, customs, cuisines and various tourist attractions of a place. just by watching his channel, an individual can become familiar with a place.

Travel always is expensive and time-consuming. Traveling to places requires days of preparation, planning and execution of plans. It also requires financial assistance to afford the tickets for the flights or the train, for the accommodations and for the food. Some may need to use their savings or need to take aids from their family or close relatives. It also demands some time off from regular work which can also have problems at workplace. Hence, traveling just for the sake of knowing a culture or tradition of a place is pointless as cheaper and effective options are available theses days such as videos, movies, and information on journals and books.

In conclusion, traveling just to learn the cultural diversities is not necessary as it takes a lot of your time and effort and also the same can be learned through books, films and is available for free on the internet.
You should really try to write within a limit, no more than 300-320 words. The problem with excessive writing is that you may run out of time and have no opportunity to fix issues and proofread.
Your ideas are good and convincing and good vocabulary is also used. At the same time, you have repeated a spelling mistake (these written as theses).
So, aim to write within limits and proofread your work. By following these simple tips only you can ensure 7-7.5 band.
 

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